Topic 29 Statistics of Family Expenses in Shanghai
根据上图描述该城市家庭支出的变化
分析产生这些变化的原因
说明这些变化对个人和社会产生的影响
Statistics of Family Expenses in Shanghai
As revealed in the above table,the past two decades has wit-nessed a sharp decrease of 48% in expenses on food and clothing, while expenses on recreation, education, health care and others have increased respectively by 5% , 16%,10% and 18%.
To account for this phenomenon, people have come up with vari-ous reasons listed below. To begin with,the price of food and clothing has remained relatively unchanged during the past years while people’s average income has risen dramatically,which contributes to the decrease of spending percentage on it. In addition, when people are well fed and dressed, they will undoubtedly begin to interest them-selves in recreation and education. What’s more, with family income increasing, people began to give first priority to medical care to improve their health.
Such changes have a significant impact on both individuals and the whole society. For one thing,people are paying increasing attention on the overall quality of their life. For another, the government will lay greater emphasis on the construction of recreation, education and health care facilities. (174 词)
一句话点评
毫无疑问,第一段的5个数据将吸引阅卷老师的眼球,同时还 使用了图表作文常用的开头句式As revealed in the above table,... 以及decade,witness, a sharp decrease of等好词及短语,使第一段 非常的出彩。
快捷构思
第一段:直接用“一句话”描述该城市家庭支出的变化,表达出 表格所要阐述的内容。
第二段:本段是本文写作的重点:分析产生这种变化的原因,' 使用了结构衔接词组To begin with, In addition, What’s more,使文章富有层次感。
第三段:说明这些变化对个人和社会产生的影响。首先,人们 % 对生活质量的要求高了起来;其次,为满足人们的这 种要求,政府必然要在各项基础设施的建设上加大投 人。
美丽词句
1.as revealed in 如... 中所显
2.come up with 提出
3.contribute to 有助于 促成
4.lay emphasis on 强调