Topic 2 Starting Career in a Big City or Small Town
1.很多的大学生希望毕业后留在大城市工作
2.也有人选择到小城镇开始自己的职业生涯
3.我自己的想法
Starting Career in a Big City or Small Town
As regards where to start career, there has been a heated discussion among college students. Graduates who prefer to stay in big cities after graduation believe that big cities means more opportunities to see the big world and more space for career development
By contrast,others are willing to start career in small towns. According to a recent survey conducted by China Daily,a high proportion of college graduates as high as 58. 3 percent want to have a quieter and less competitive life. In addition, by working in small towns,they can easily get the management's attention and may win promotion earlier.
As far as I am concerned,I prefer to start career in a big city like Beijing where I can meet people from different places and cultures. I will learn from them what I can not get from textbooks.(139词)
“一句话”点评
毫无疑问,第二段的China Daily和百分比吸引了阅卷老师的眼球。conduct , a proportion of等好词及短语的使用则增加了亮点。
快捷构思
第一段:在模板句引人话题后接着提出首段中心“很多大学生希望毕业后留在大城市工作”,并用more opportunities to see the big world和more space for career development两个原因来支持段落中心。
第二段:开门见山展现段落中心“也有人选择到小城镇开始自己的职业生涯”。而后“一句话”解释原因,说明一部分的毕业生想要过安静、竞争少的生活。最后进一步阐述,在小城镇生活能够很快的提升。
第三段:直接展现自己观点,并提出简要的一个原因I will learn from them what I can not get from textbooks.
美丽词句
(1) more opportunities to see the big world更多接触世界的机会
(2) more space for career development更多职业发展的空间
(3) a quieter and less competitive life安静、少竞争的生活
(4) win promotion获得提升